Darkness Over Death

Because I could not stop death,
He kindly stopped for me.

^Nicely way of openin your poem here. i like it

He tore at my skin, deep within,
Not listening to my plea.

^wow bery imagie. gave me a small shiver. nice flow as well

As I stand, the shadows become night,
And the darkness of death eases the pain.

^wow bery powerful lines you wrote here. wouldnt change a thing

Death drinks my blood, as I scream for acid rain.

^scarie... i could see that through my mind.

There he stands... death... in a clear, moonless sky.

^amazing line...

I then wait for the rain, as I slowly die.

^ a nice way to end your piece here. i love it. very dark n deep you have here. i'll keep reading on.
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TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy