Comments : Darkness Over Death

  • 15 years ago

    by CanUKissAwayMyPain

    Because I could not stop death,
    He kindly stopped for me.

    ^Nicely way of openin your poem here. i like it

    He tore at my skin, deep within,
    Not listening to my plea.

    ^wow bery imagie. gave me a small shiver. nice flow as well

    As I stand, the shadows become night,
    And the darkness of death eases the pain.

    ^wow bery powerful lines you wrote here. wouldnt change a thing

    Death drinks my blood, as I scream for acid rain.

    ^scarie... i could see that through my mind.

    There he stands... death... in a clear, moonless sky.

    ^amazing line...

    I then wait for the rain, as I slowly die.

    ^ a nice way to end your piece here. i love it. very dark n deep you have here. i'll keep reading on.
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    TaKe CaRe,
    Frenchy