by jescelle Apr 7, 2009
category :
Life, society /
other
Slip. Fall. Crash. |
by Lemma
Wow check out that awesome rhythm! It's like "punch punch pow!" Very very effective with great use of vocab, rhyme and varied stanza length. One line that jumped out at me for a reason I can't put my finger on was "make up the game but never win." It was just awesome. If I could give this a 6 I would. Definitely going into my list of favourite poems and you're now on my list of favourite authors. Thanks for this one! |
by Teria
Love it |
Amazing flow rhythm & rhyme sharing in a general way mostly the dark past |
by Kristina
Wow! This is a really good poem. I enjoyed reading it very much. I think you did a wonderful job on it. Keep on writing! 5/5 |
My style in almost every poem is to rhyme and keep the flow perfect. I feel the great writers can get the same message across while rhyming as others do without. This was a unique poem and the word play was excellent. anybody can write a 6 line poem and have somebody give them a 5/5 but this one earns it nice work |