This is a good poem. Its quick to read and easy to understand with a good flow. I enjoyed it alot and got what you were trying to say. Excellent writing.

5/5

Ashley.

Great poem [:
i had lines like that in my head,
5/5

Easy and quick, starts excited and motivated, then becomes sad and a bit of a downer. Do not get me wrong, this is not a bad thing, its truly a really well written poem and truely makes one think about limitations we has humans really have, how much pain is in the world and how much we all wish to be about the cruel ways of the world.

Olwin
You did an awesome job on this piece. I was drawn into it right away and related to exactly what you wrote.
Graet job!
((hugs))
Cindy