"I wonder sometimes if you dream too
Of what could happen between us two"
`I did not like these lines, you can obviously tell that the rhyme is forced throughout most of the poem and these two lines it obvious. Too and two have two different meanings, yet they dont even rhyme..

I did however kind of like your touch of repetition.

I dont know if it was just me but I wasnt too much of a fan of this one..must of been the rhyming. I prefer free-verse, cause rhyming is forced way too often..and when it becomes visible the poem kind of just falls apart..

I think this poem was just okay.. maybe thats just me..

Temps.
[Beyond a Poets Mind]

Wow-i think this is really sweet yet sad.
very easy to read-flow is constant throughout and rhyme is good and not too forced.

repitition works well-nice technique.

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aish
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