I liked this poem because it was simple but yet powerful and to the point it tells a story of sadness but yet with so few words well constucted

well done

Wow, that was pretty great. I really like the style of writing you used. And how short you kept it, I think that if you lengthened it, it woulnd't work out as well. I, also, like how you defined the words you used. this is quite a unique style to write in, good job.

Soda E>

Your poem was really strong because of the format and the way you kept it short. Very powerful lines and indeed..all you said was so very true:)

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

Good poem and though it was short it was to the point. The flow was good and it had a good concept. The poem also had a good rhyme as well. Good job.

Nice job !! I liked this short and simple poem. I think I have left my own pile of rubble behind at some point in my life where others have chosen to stumble around in it - looking for whatever they can find. I think the words you chose were just right and the meaning of each line seemed to come through OK. keep up the nice writes. Peace - Tom

O.m.g such simple, simple words had such a powerful meanin and heartbreaking touch that many people felt. i sure have. i love it. my 2rd favorite. nicely done.
5/5

TaKe caRe,
Frenchy