Fantasy Dreams

Hi Cindy,

What a great feeling after reading it:) It's very inspirational. 5/5! Congrats!

A very touching tribute, your words all cary so much meaning and it halds a very vivid reflection of how you feel on a personal level.
this was a really good read =) 5*

"Come and join me my love
Reach out and take my hand
Let's go on an adventure
Exploring magical lands"
`Great beginning, youve already brought us into this fantasy world.. such a beautiful start.

"My chariot awaits you
It's at your beckon call
Arms tightly around you
To catch you if you fall"
`I understand you used a LOT of 'you''s.. but in this case that didnt hurt your poem at least in my opinion, I thought it complimented your flow and helped the poem out nicely.. instead of demolishing it.

"The radio is playing
All of our favorite songs
Been waiting for this moment
So hurry come a long "
`If I were you maybe put a comma after hurry?

"Don't want to miss a moment
The day will soon fade away
See beauty all around us
I really wish we could stay"
`Awh, the simplicity of your words are beautiful. Definatly a great description of two people in a fantasy world.. not wanting to miss a single moment, and the beauty that surrounds the both of you. You wish you could stand here forever. Perfectly written.

"Sadly we must wake again
Leave our fantasies behind
Until another time dear
When you in my dreams I find"
`Perfect poem, its sad when we drift off to these fantasy dreams that seem so perfect and beautiful and then we wake up and we realize its reality.. but we hope that we will find this person in our dreams once again.

Loved your title.. definatly captured my eye and other readers I'm sure!

Well done. I enjoyed this. :]

5/5.

Temps {Beyond a Poets Mind}

I loved the light nature of this piece. It made it easy to read and quite refreshing. You spoke of something I am sure many can relate with which made it that much more of a joy to read.

In the 3rd and 4th stanza you repeated the word "moment" which kinda threw the flow off for me with its repitition...maybe try thinking of another words perhaps? Or maybe you did it on purpose to get a point across...

"Sadly we must wake again
Leave our fantasies behind
Until another time dear
When you in my dreams I find"
^A great ending! I think we all have that one person who always meets us in our dreams and makes sleep worthwhile. Just because in reality things are fuzzy doesnt mean you cant dream of how you want things to be and hey you never know they just might come true. Well said.

Overall this was a great piece and a joy to read.
Well done!
*5/5*

Bliss. {Beyond a Poet's Mind.}

Beautiful and it is a love poem to me. Fantasies are a good thing and as you said, we must wake and leave them behind until another dream. Good work.