Perpelexed Hearts (Collab)

by Jenni Marie   Apr 13, 2009


Such magical and beautiful years have passed between us,
now it seems we've nothing in common - love is slowly dying.
Never would have imagined I'd be leaving you on this day,
but it's your affection and emotions that you're denying.

My loving thoughts never left you - you're always on my mind,
but now it seems you've left me, alone to shed my tears.
Never would have imagined you'd be leaving me on this day,
I really do care, let me prove I can walk your stairs.

For so long it seems we've been stuck in the same old rut,
nothing seems to help, despite countless attempts we've made.
Love you more than life itself, but can't continue any longer
for it seems like we're just living a pointless masquerade.

[Exploring the path of destiny to see what fate has planned.]
Walked into my life with such grace, taking my hand like a natural ace.
But suddenly everything has changed for better or for worse,
and I have no choice but to admit - this love has been reversed.

Placing my wedding ring upon the table, wondering how we got here...
noticing that hot silent tears are streaming down my already wet face
recalling when it was you who made me feel better when I felt like this,
could make the pain melt away with just a simple kiss or tender embrace.

I promised you love until forever - love without end, amen.
But now I sit and ponder alone in the bitter darkness,
recalling our memories together and how they'll last forever.
But our perplexed hearts: metaphorically torn - separated apart.

If only you could look closer, see how much I'm hurting inside
putting on a false show every day - deserve a round of applause.
Never thought it possible to feel so alone in your embrace,
for it seems my dream man was not who I thought he was.

So I guess there's really nothing left for either of us to say,
erased pondering left my soul - excerpted now left to fall.
Never would have guessed one day I'd be standing here alone
on that special amazing, magical day when we said our "I do's."

**Collab With Joe
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=144412

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  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Thank you for taking the time to do this collaboration with me. It was a lot of fun as always. ;)

    Peace, Joe

  • 15 years ago

    by The Prince

    Sadly, the inconsistency of this poem lets it down. The rhyme scheme alters from a standard ABCB and variates throughout, making the flow jolt a bit. I got from first reading that the perspectives are joint? Like male - female alterations? If not, then this poem needs some serious altering itself. There are some nice lines that stand out that I won't bother to copy and paste, but, like I said earlier, the poem remains inconsistent and some of the wording is a bit hit and miss, and some of the rhyming is a bit forced. Not sure if 'tears' and 'stairs' rhyme..
    I'd have liked it if you'd used flashback to show the persona the current situation, as it simply reads like a poetic rant of loss and heartbreak, which could be written by a troubled teenager. As I said earlier, there are some nice lines, but they're let down by too many things said too many times in too many other poems.
    Admire the length of the write, but could be better.

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