Unexpected down fall

by East Poetry   Apr 14, 2009


Please help me not to love you,
I don't want to anymore.
My heart is in a free fall,
When will it hit the floor?

And as it falls I wonder...
Will there ever be an ending?
My star falling through an emptiness,
the ultimate descending.

I'm looking and I'm longing
fore the moment it will snap.
To bleep out of existence,
and escape this endless trap.

But then no matter what you do,
I seem to just forgive.
Impossible to hate you,
For it's not the way I live.

So I sit here in the silence,
As I feel this bodies pain.
Thoughts of losing my first true love,
keep pulsing through my brain.

Just waiting for that moment,
when my heart will finally crash.
the moment when our shooting star
Blinks out and turns to ash.

And as I sit....I wonder.
thinking... of our infinity?
Together... in a free fall,
in a never ending sea.

As forever, what you do,
will I always just forgive.
Impossible to hate you,
for it's not the way I live.

I know I'll always love you.
But I don't want to anymore.
My heart is in a free fall,
When will it hit the floor?

Eternally it's falling
from somewhere up above.
As an unexpected down fall...

...of unconditional love.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Mello193

    I thought this more as a song. but awesome. im a little confused as to if youd want to leave her and be solitary. or you just cant stop loving her. thinking now i think a little bit of both. great job as always, this was loads of fun to read

  • 14 years ago

    by Tripp

    Another great one. I think I'm starting to get a handle on your style, and I like it a lot. It's a tad predictable, but it works for you, so by all means keep at it!

    I can empathize with the feelings you weaved into this poem...the ambivalent yet visceral response to one whom you love, yet that doesn't reciprocate the feelings you so terribly desire.

    Unconditional love is right. Whether it's unwarranted or not on the other hand, is up to you to decide.

    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by KJ

    Randy,
    You should write more. You do such an amazing job when it comes to writing love poetry. This is no exception. You did a great job with the format. I can tell that you put a lot into it.
    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Jackie

    A beautiful poem, well written 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Sexual hysterias

    I actually thought that this was very good. I don't believe that in four lined stanza-styled poetry, that punctuation is always needed. It's always different with each poet. If you look in books of published poetry from professionals, even they don't use punctuation sometimes. It just depends on what you're feeling at that time, I think. If you actually want them to pause in the middle of a stanza, I believe a comma would be appropriate, but at the end of a line? I don't believe that is needed. I believe that when a line ends, people don't read the next one in the same breath as that one.

    Ex:
    I've always wanted only you
    the you I thought you'd be
    When burdens of a stress filled life
    were sanctified by me

    ^^ "It happened one night" said that
    you needed a comma after life, which
    I totally disagree. I believe that the pause
    is sort of insinuated without the need of a comma.

    I think that without a period at the end of a line in a stanza, you could instead capitalize the first letter of the next line to make it flow as you would like it to.

    I believe this piece is wonderful. I hope I helped. Keep it up!

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