by Bhavin Apr 15, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Sitting aimlessly near the window panes |
This is surely one of the best collab read. I really loved the theme as that made me think again and again. Also it made me realize that i am not the only one having such thoughts. |
by Faithless
What a powerful collaboration the 2 of you. The 1st stanza pulls me right into the poem. I like the imaginary presented in the poem along with how you guys poured down your thoughts.I also like how you repeatedly used 'an impossible find' through out the stanza.It really work for me in this case. I was totally blown away with how you guys end it. The choice of words and how it was placed in the sentence was superb. Both your words just melts together into 1. |
by Sylvia
Well done on the collab, cannot tell there were two writers. Sometimes happiness, joy do seem to be an impossible find to all of us but with luck we can eventually find them. Good job. |
by kelleyana
I like the concept of this poem, yet it really sad and dark. I just realize that i don't have too much of a dark side . I always believe that after the rain the sun will shine again. Check out my original. Very well done, next time i hope you call on me to write a happy poem with you. Let your light shine in the dark. Very well done my friend. 5/5, kel. |
by Ingrid
You both did a good job on described how hopeless one can feel at times. I really felt sad reading all the ways in which you cannot find happiness and joy. |