Breaking apart

"It was friendship in the beginning;
but you could see it in their eyes,
there love was strong as fire,
but as calm as ocean tides."
^^good intro. in the third line 'there' should be 'their'. but good way to catch the reader's attention. also loved the fact that you wrote a poem from the 3rd point of view.

"Nobody really knew,
the story of how much there love had grown,
from just a little friendship,
to love as solid as a stone."
^^great flow. once again 'there' should be 'their'.

"Yes, there only young,
but look right in their eyes,
you will see that firey passion that burns them inside..
Yes, they have been torn and almost fell apart;
but now their loves stronger than ever,
because they know they may not depart. "
^^Okay I'm not trying to rewrite your poem or anything; but I would like to make a suggestion to this stanza:

'Yes they are young,
but if you look into their eyes...
You will see a blazing passion,
burning on the inside.

Yes, they have been torn,
and almost fell apart.
But now their love is strong as ever,
a love that will never part'

It is only a suggestion. But i think that the flow would be better and the format would be complete if you sepearte the last stanza into two stanzas. Overall, great write.
5.

I like it 5/5

Sorry about the above. What I was attempting to impress is just how much imagery and emotion you can acheive when writing about love. Try writing about how you felt by usung metaphors to help magnify, or truely impress your point. Really sing about your feeling and breathe life to your poem.

Take care

Michael

A tale of love, a friendship that blossomed into a relationship where love sought the sky. Nature free to show this world just how love can reach up to the heavens. Feel loves finger's caress the encompassing warmth of two hearts, merging their souls so that they can sour the skies with music in their eyes and beauty in their song. Hark now the angles rejoice in loves true splendour.

I really like this write, its very creative, and over all just a beautiful write. I will say, you should put into paragraph formation, so it's easy to read and easier to follow. But apart from that i have to say this is a truly amazing write, very descriptive and worded strongly. I enjoyed the read and i will add it to my favs. Keep it up. 5/5