"So simple - a pure wish from my heart,
How quickly it was taken from me,
A soft flutter - it was torn apart,
Crushed into the paper mache you see,"

Excellent opening stanza, very captivating and draws the reader into what you are saying.

"A fair resemblance of how you fell,
Tearing out every ounce of my pain,
You bought each lie I would sell,
Killing your soul as I went insane,"

Wow, your rhyming here and word choice is stunning, so powerful and deep.

"Now the world is something I miss,
Trapped inside this feeling - hate,
I would kill for just one kiss,
The key to my star-crossed fate,"

Very uniquely worded I thought, well-expressed thoughts and feelings, you portrayed your emotions well here and gave the reader a clear description of what was going on.

"Invisible in this isolated hell,
Will you save me from my insanity?
Even the gods in heaven can tell,
I'm slowly drifting into vanity... "

Great ending, leaving the reader completely satisfied. A true joy to read, your words took me on a journey. Continue writing, forever and always....

God Bless You!

~MaryAnne