A sad subject that children are made into slaves for people who profit from their suffering. Well done.

Slavery has been going on for a long time, and you did well summing it up with just a few words. I love where you get your inspiration from, it always makes your poems that more interesting to read. Good choice on the form as well.

Well done.
5/5.

Temps [Beyond a Poets Mind]

Your title really captured my attention. What you wrote is so true. I mean I get the message that you're trying to put across. It's sad that these children has to work at such a young age to make ends meet...not knowing that their time is shorten by the chemicals and diseases that struck them. I really love this piece.

The inspiration for your poetry is always so catching. You write from the heart about topics we wish didn't exist.
I find that your poetry educates me, makes me read more, know more, and want to help more.
You're a really great person, and your poems show that.

Such few words summed up such a severe topic.

"Work until you drop,
without hope for better life."
`For the flow here I think you could get rid of the coma, it makes the final line more effective in my opinion.
The alliteration of "work" and "without" created a flow you wouldn't usually find in such a short piece.

"Old before your time."
`I love how you are talking to the children, telling them its wrong and they deserve better.

Oh wow, as I was commenting this an ad came on TV and I could hear it from the other room. I doubt you have this ad where you are but it goes "Every child, every child deserves a child hood. Every child, every single child, deserves to live."

Excellent write, hun.