OMG! This just grabs your attention and won't let go! The only bad thing is that it ends!

"Grab my hand, pattern my thoughts
Make me feel like I am nothing at all"

Great line!! Keep writing!!

This was amazing. I felt so many raw and heartfelt emotions here. The style is different, but it works here. I love how deep this was. You weren't afraid to give this poem your all. Very nice work. Shanik

This was amazingly deep... I know exactly what you mean...

A great piece. A wonderful choice of words and emotions, i could feel them as i read. A deep powerful piece. And the form it was written in is unique, loved it. 5/5

Ashlei.

WOW