Still (Fibonacci)

by Lonely Rider   Apr 20, 2009


Still,
my
eyes search
for that smile
in your empty face,
beaming from your last photograph.

Why each night I feel loneliness
enclosing on me?
Stardust hurt.
and I
cry,
still.

**Fibonacci
The number of syllables in each line must equal the sum of the syllables in the two previous lines. So, start with 0 and 1, add them together to get your next number, which is also 1, 2 comes next, then add 2 and 1 to get 3, and so on. Fibonnaci: 0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, 13, ... Poetry: 1 syllable, 1 syllable, 2 syllables, 3 syllables, 5 syllables, 8 syllables, 13 syllables, 21 syllables...

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  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    A thought provoking piece. Excellent job adhering to the rules of this form. I haven't seen this form before, it has an interesting structure.

  • 15 years ago

    by Francis Vaska

    Great use of wisdom to create such an amazing poem

  • 15 years ago

    by The Queen

    Vey well written. A very short form yet painted vivid sadness nad loneliness.. Ive read some of your works and i can honestly say, they are awesome.. I liked the pattern and the adjectives you used, supporting every second stanzas that is if im not mistaken..First it was about the smile then 2nd stanza was about the night..Well elaborated in just few words..Deep and touching..Very expressive, few words most of the times means more than anything.Good job..

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Raj
    You did an awesome job with this form. The sadness can be felt in the words you chose.
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    This is so beautifullly crafted! I loved the format and you got the message across in such a profound way..It's awfull to be left alone, one of the hardest things in life to cope with.

    A beautiful write, hats off.

    Take care,

    5/5 Ingrid

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