Paper Roses

I cant say this piece is perfect, it seems a little plain. But I can say it is a nice idea and that i enjoy the style. Maybe if you used a move varried set of descriptions i would enjoy it more; I mean it just needs something (to me at least. Granted you seem to have many fans so... Im probably just weird)

However I do think this piece has some great potential and I like the way your voice shines and the emotion is unmistakeable.

4/5

Wow this is sooo beatiful(:

I loved the ending

He loves me,
He loves me not,
He loves me.
He truly loves me.

^^ flawles(: love
5/5 from me ...the sweetest poem ever

xx

This poem is just too adorable. Love is a truly amazing thing. I was wondering where you were going with the paper and roses but at the end you explained and it was a very creative idea. Very unique. Tying something all of us to (choosing a flower and picking off the petals trying to figure out if we are loved or not). With your poetic idea.
My favorite stanza was:
In our bed of red roses and paper,
I write you letters on each petal.
Of daydreams and wishes I've had,
and the life we will have together.
Just so sweet.

Beautiful
5/5

Darien, I've always loved your love poems. This was good, but I felt it wasn't your best. The overall imagery was good which I liked. The first stanza I thought was a little sloppy compared to the second, just my opinion of course. I also didn't really like the ending, you built the poem up for the driving punch at the end, which I felt you didn't deliver. With a little tweaking here and there, I think this poem can be fantastic. Keep up the good work my friend.

Peace, Joe

Cuuuuuuuute as.
Very cute, Darien.