Ingrid, I like this form of poetry so much that I think I will have to have a go.

You have written about a pain of rejection, a loss of a wonderful life/ love that was dangled like a carrot and then snatch away. It is better to have never seen the carrot, right?

Years on the memories and the knowledge of loneliness is a raw combination. Who can shake such dispair?

Friends can help restore a life that clings to the past. We never feel lonely again when we have such friends.

Well done my dear friend.

((hugs)) xx

Wow, this looks like a complex form once you read on how to write it, but you made it look so easy. There was so much passion and deepness in this piece, I could start to feel what you were feeling. Excellent job with this form, every line was so well-worded and flowed together so nicely! Thanks for posting, a real joy to come upon. 5/5 of course from me. Take care and God Bless You!

~MaryAnne

Excellent work and it is sad. The words are powerful such as these, Echoes haunt the desolate shore of my dreamscape land. Well done.

You have done a wonderful job on this form... beautifully written... touching..
in few words you did magic...

and thank you so much for mentioning my link :)

Sad and painful....seaching for a way to find a happy ending....truly pain but yet I like it =]

Fibonacci - Great choice of form, you seem to always be trying new things.. and as a poet I think thats huge when you challenge yourself, so well done! I loved how you made it your own and reversed it as well.

"In
you
I found
a soul mate.
You denied me, us,
demonized me for loving you."
`Your word choice is simple, I would really try to expand your word choice though, you tend to use such simple word choice. Give the reader a challenge, make them infer what youre talking about.. and dont give it away so easily.. although I know thats hard to do with such short forms.. but I know you could do it! Your words speak sadness and denial... obviously!

"Echoes haunt the desolate shore
of my dreamscape land.
Happiness
never
was
real."
`Again your words speak sadness, and pain as well. Happiness was never real was a great ending, powerful but extremely sad filled.

Not much else to say, keep it up with trying new forms and styles of poetry. :]

5/5.

Temps (Beyond a Poets Mind)

Love is a powerful tool ingrid , in the hands of the pepole that deserve it , the pepole that are trully in love

and a time bomb in the hands of those that are in fake love.

always ! look at this like it is ! time can only be the judge of waht come next !

i hate the feeling of disapointment , soo i dont make expectation for me..

great expression you are good in finding words hat make me think of them behond there context

CJ

This poem is simply beautiful:

'You denied me, us,'

Minor syntax error there, it doesn't sound quite right to me. Liked the alliteration, that 'D' sound was quite prominent.
Beautiful poem. :)

Simply beautiful.

This is a unique style and one i haven't seen before very clever in deed. its an emotional poem, and you can feel that from the first sentence 'in you i found a soul mate.' normally this would start off in a love poem but its such a slap in the face with ethe following line 'then you denied us.. thats a blunt and strong sentence to follow.
you also end on a very blunt point that happiness never was real, and again blunt to the point and not wordly.
i loved the simplicity of this form as well as your wording, it was eaily read. i even liked the little metaphor on the second stanza, gives it a little more 'kick up the backside'.

i have absolutely no faults with this.

so round of applause and again i loved the style xx

A sad but beautiful write.Your choice of words chosen well and the depth and meaning quite vivid.
An enjoyable read.
Paul...

Ingrid...you are a phenomenal woman.. I am sorry I didnt re comment again..and am sorry for myself that I didnt give my soul words like urs..to dive in..

aint this just a very sad.a very true poem to relate to ?
whats more sad than a love that held so many dreams..and then shattered down just like the untrue happiness
of our world..

5/5
incredible u

I like your different poems in different forms, you have taught me a new form here which I would like to practice.

Well done, keep it up!