You know sometimes i wish i had blue eyes. or atleast eyes of those who are blind.. i think their eyes are really cool.. i love the poem.. i didnt know i mean that much..

Very wonderful! It was much better than I had anticipated (I have a... hard spot towards love poems). The imagery of the line "Echo in the pit of my heart" really start off strong. I actually semi-skipped over the first line, maybe if you add some "depth" to that it could be improved. Also the line the second stanza "of winter" is significantly shorter, so perhaps if u add some description, so as "of a bonechiling winter" or "of greeting card winter" or something...
Also the last stanza is not as strong as the others. You should use it as an oportunity to package all the emotion u had in the previous and send it at the reader with a final punch.

A couple of lines are too short and throw of the melodic flow you've got going on .. And it's really cliche , but I like how even if some lines aren't perfect rhymes they still fit really well . I think this is really fantastic , but maybe using a stronger vocabulary and more original ideas would help . 5/5

A couple of lines are too short and throw of the melodic flow you've got going on .. And it's really cliche , but I like how even if some lines aren't perfect rhymes they still fit really well . I think this is really fantastic , but maybe using a stronger vocabulary and more original ideas would help . 5/5

This peom is soo sweet. i love the description and how it flows so beautifully. it makes me think how love should really be and how i want tht in my life. thanks for opening my eyes.

Love the flow of it... love it!

Such a beautiful love poem.. i thought it flowed great. and its refreshing to read about true love, not heartbreak. love it, keep it up :)

I feel like this poem is a wonderful message to all lovers out there. The way you put it together, the imagery the power behind it truly shined. 5/5