by Lady Nik Apr 21, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Jailed bird fly away from here. Nowhere to be found once you disappear. What have you done with my heart? I need the light, take me from the dark. Jailed bird to often gone. Locked out and on your own. Take the pain, take the fear. Jailed bird fly away from here. |
I think its really good... i love how you kept going back to the first verse and how you ended the poem... awesome! 5/5 |
by Jad
This was a awesome poem. I hope that your dad gets out soon or when its his time. Sorry though. Well at any rate the emotion in the poem was obvious and the flow was good though it didn't seem to be a structure poem. The rhyme was good as well. So for the most part this was a good heart filled poem. |