Wow the rhyme pattern (correct me if im wrong) of a,b,b,a,c,c,a is very unique and i really like it. only the last stanza doesnt have this, it just has an a,b,b,c,d,d,a but thats ok.

the repitition is nice throughout-establishingand maintaining the ideas and emotions you present throughout the poem.

really really good!

5/5

aish
xx

This one. :]