The unforgiving

You have a wonderful gift with twisting and bending words to your will, a beautiful span of vocabulary. The flow in this poem was again near perfection. I like how each stanza almost seems to be a story and yet linked together by an even larger overall topic. 5/5

The poem is great and I enjoyed it very much.
I was at first offended by the lines, God will give them blood to drink and That God will give us blood to drink in the first and sixth stanza until I read your explanation in the comment column. Blasphemy is still all around us even today, so metaphorically we must still be aware of the consequences when using poetic license if we want to reach our heaven. People today think through Jesus Christ that we are all saved maybe we are yet as a true believer in the trinity I like to edge my bets if you will pardon the pun. Why risk offend the God you love. 5/5 Ray S

I really liked your rhyme here, it was almost perfect at most of the times, I couldn't guess what's going on next, which is a good thing.

"Though if you take a deeper look
You might find them in the good book"

^Must you use the "though" here? I think less fillers=less confusion in the poem, without it the poem looks much better :)

"It all boils down to a simple choice
We may be sorry, or we may rejoice"

^ I don't think you need the "or" in the last line, it looks better without it.
This couplet had the most cliche wording of the whole poem..I thought the poem in all was very good, but here the rhyme went a little bit off.

"Our mind's often too proud too think"

^Should be "Our mind's often too proud to think"
and a good line by the way :) well chosen !

"Forbearance of contrite sisters and brothers
As we are forgiven we must forgive others"

^ I think those lines were my fave, especially the second one, well done.

I found it pretty odd the line you repeated:
"God will give us blood to drink" I didn't really like it, it was dark..really really dark and I don't believe in this darkness.
Overall..I gotta say I haven't read dark poems in a while, but this one was really good, your flow-like I said- went almost flawless.
Very well written.
Way to go :-)

Thank you very much for the comment the poem was inspired by the events of innocent people being hung as witches

The last words revisited in the house of seven gables
I young girls last words to her prosecutor
" God will give you blood to drink" came true when a blood vessel burst inside the witch hunter

Tormented words written in ink
God will give them blood to drink
Golden rules for all the living
Rejected boldly by the unforgiving

* This seemed so vivid to me. I had to read the poem twice before i could fully take it in and understand it, but i like that about it. The bold rejection gave so much power to your words.

Words written in many ancient fables
Revisited in the house of seven gables
Though if you take a deeper look
You might find them in the good book

* I like this as well. Again, very vivid as you read it. I like the way you bring the reader to piece together the stories we hear in our youth to the stories we read in the bible. your words couldn't have been any better!

Revenge is sweet to the witches
Coveting carnal wealth and riches
Buried treasures in tainted ground
What is given freely comes around

* Honestly, i don't understand this at all. To me, it kind of offsets the poem.

Darkness comes to the wicked in a curse
For everything holy there is the reverse
It all boils down to a simple choice
We may be sorry, or we may rejoice

We may judge, and cast the first stone
Yet, judgment is for the Lord alone
Forbearance of contrite sisters and brothers
As we are forgiven we must forgive others

When we turn away from blessed bread
Our heart is cold and our soul is dead
Our mind's often too proud too think
That God will give us blood to drink

* These three flow wonderfully and bring a lot of perspective to me personally, and hopefull all that read it. There is nothing i would change at all! i love these three! My favorite.

The world has been baptized by flood
Mercifully cleansed by divine blood
We may rise above, or we may sink
But, God will give us blood to drink

* Wonderful way to end the poem. The only thing i don't quite care for is
"The world has been baptized by flood
Mercifully cleanesed by divine blood."
I think the second line is beautiful, but i don't quite feel a flow.

All together a great poem! I really enjoyed reading it! :-)