Comments : Beautiful Morn(Etheree)

  • 15 years ago

    by Sylvia

    You captured a perfect morning. Makes me feel good just reading your words. Well done.

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Raj
    What a beautiful array of words to describe a perfect morning :)
    Excellent!
    Love Cindy

  • 15 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Hey Raj,

    Another awesome piece though i have to admit to one reality. If you could see so much beauty around you then its not just the magic of nature but also the beauty thats inside you.
    Awesome write dear

    all the best and take care

  • 15 years ago

    by Corinne

    This is exquisite! The words are so vibrant and bring the day alive! Excellent writing.

  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "Dews
    shimmer"
    `Couldnt you just say "dew" I dont see why it would have to be plural here. I did really love your way of describing the dew, how it shimmer.. I can imagine this vividly.

    "as sunbeams
    sprinkle warmth on"
    `What gorgeous word choice this poem has. I loved sprinkle that just added a lot to the poem, and how the sun beams down.. unique way of thinking of this!

    "sleepy canvas of
    tangerine horizon;"
    `Woow.. the sun is apperently rising, I can imagine the sun peaking above the horizon, really loved the word sleepy and tangerine.. just absolutely perfect to describe a beautiful morning.

    "blinking, yawning milieu wakes,
    feathers flutter higher, chirping"
    `Loved your alliteration with 'feathers flutter' .. I can now hear these birds awake and chirping to start a new morning.

    "a song of life, dancing to the tune
    that embraces another beautiful morn."
    `Your Etheree was just overflowing with beautiful imagery. You put us in this place and let us vividly imagine this ourselves like you did. Your last line seems to have 11 syllables however - but thats the only thing I can see wrong with this part.

    Very beautiful Etheree.

    5/5.

    Temps [Beyond a Poets Mind]

  • 15 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    Raj,
    How beautiful my dear. The imagery you provide in such an exquisite piece of work is amazing. I could envision the beauty and feel the warmth of the sunbeams. Oh how beautiful. Marvelous Job

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Great job on this form. Beautiful, vivid imagery. I love the word choice. Excellent!