Black Roses Collab (End of Eternity)

This was quite a dark read. I too think it relates alot to society and the things going on at this moments as well as ones that happened centuries ago. Great job.

The two of you has portrayed mankind's evil ways so vividly in this dark yet beautifully penned piece.
It's always a pleasure to read these colabs from you two.
Keep up the great job my friend.
Paul...

I somehow didn't like the rhyme of this piece.
it went off in most of the stanzas.
But overall a very dark poem that attracts readers, of course those who love dark poetry.

Try not to focus on the rhyme way too much next time and it's going to work out perfectly :)
well done both of you!

Very dark, yet very well done. There is a wide schism between the poor and rich. Not sure how I feel about the glamorization of death and darkness though. There is a charm to the dark, but light has its beauty as well.

Very touching write... dark indeed...

Bible in hands of the poor
Rich become masters of sin
Dead wandering centuries
But their greed wont give in

^^ the last line is so true... greed is what that has resulted in the outbreak of so many mishappenings...

Screams echo in the night
Beastly demons enflict pain
Disfigured tormented souls
Drive a normal man insane

^^ There's a deep meaning hidden in these words... well penned...

Garden of corpses wait
Walk with me my love
Few angels along with evil
All fallen from high above

^^I loved this stanza... there's a longingess for someone to walk with you... to hold you when you fall... the last two lines are thought provoking... angels and evils...both from above... loved it...

Mist sourrounds black roses
Hold my hand show me the way
Thorns waiting to draw blood
Lay with me in our grave

^^just couldnt stop reading these verses... so so touching...

loved the title too... :)