Birth Of Spring ( Collab with Kiko)

Grid,

a collaboration with a talented writer indeed.

Birth Of Spring
^
An obvious title, but it lets the reader know exactly what to expect - I like it!

A cool,
gentle shower
caresses the lush,
vibrant meadow.
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These words roll off the tongue so well. I guess just like the rain rolling off the meadow to feed the previously cold starved earth.

Awakened from their
wintry slumber,
restive maples sprout
fresh, silken buds.
^
lol - I see this stanza talks of the winter past. I like how you describe it as its slumber. A time off required rest before the birth of spring - ahh, I see the title now! Restive maples - I like this description, very apt.

Cheery crocuses
issue forth in
a profusion of
whites, reds, and purples.
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Cheery crocuses - a happy flower indeed. It adds a kind of human emotion to the scene. I also like the word profusion in context with the list of vibrant colours. Nice.

Playful daffodils
herald the season
with their brilliant,
yellow trumpets.
^
As soon as I read 'Herald' in relation to the daffs, I could picture the center trumpet - very effective. Also, haveing it sybolising the start of spring; like a celebration. Again, the word playful, another human emotion, but it could refer to anmals too.

Mischievous cubs and
Shaky-legged fawns
gambol and frolic
in the verdant grass.
^..and here they are, cute ones too cubs and fawns. You have described them so well that I can see them so clearly.

All of nature
bustles with new life.
And the world is...
reborn.
^
In the last stanza you have brought together the poem, summarising it so that it is left imprinted on the readers mind, well mine anyway! lol

Well done on this collaboration, it is fabulous.

Michael

A beautiful and refreshing write of one of natures beauty.
An enjoyable read indeed.
Paul..

That was beautiful, I loved the last line! It tied up all the wonderful images that you created, 5/5.

-mandy :)

And the world is reborn, Spring does that and it is a joy. Nice collab. Well done to both of you.