Confusion

by Jad   Apr 24, 2009


Not knowing what is real
These false emotions kill
Drowned in confusion
Buried in illusions

Can't distinguish whats fake
Seeing a full blood lake
This really can not be
What I am forced to see

The pain I face each day
Leads me in different ways
Not knowing which way to go
Confused I fall in deep snow

The cold hits me again
As my emotions rend
Inside,froze to the core
Trying to find deaths door

Unable to find rest
Thinking if my life less
Not caring what happens
Confusion I'm trapped in

This world of disillusion
Lost in the confusion
Never find myself again
Blown away by the wind

So I go my own way
Nothing now left to say
As my mind is confused
And my emotion is loosed

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  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    There was some repetition in this with the word 'confusion' but overall, that was your main point was to talk about the confusion you face. Many emotions running through your words, clearly felt by the reader. I thought you did well with this, again. Your word choice is quite simple but it works well.

    5/5.
    Temps [Beyond a Poets Mind]

  • 15 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Thinking if my life less
    -- I'm not really sure what you were trying to say here. o.O

    And my emotion is loosed
    -- Not really sure with that one either.. Maybe it was a typo or something, or maybe I'm just not smart enough to get it. Haha

    Anyways..
    I think I liked this poem more than the other one. It just felt like there was more emotion in it, and it came from your heart. Like you didn't try to think of things to write, it just sort of happened. I love poems like that. :]

    Seeing a full blood lake
    -- That line was a little disturbing.. but I liked it. lol

    I noticed that you used the word or form of the word "Confused". I like that you used it, but sometimes it's not good to over use it. Maybe change some of them up with a different word? Maybe dazed. I like that one. Haha. You don't have to if you don't want to though.

    Inside,froze to the core
    -- You should put a space after the comma. :]

    I really did like this poem.
    [:

    Keep writing.

    Cayce

    By the way.. I read in your profile that you liked Linkin Park. They're like my favorite band, and this poem sounds like them. XD

    Just thought I'd say that.