Truth

Deana,
Oh my dear heavens! This is the most remarkable piece of yours and among my very favorites of everyones. You were able to place yourself into an era bygone and speak the language and most likely the tone of what the character would have said. I have oft heard my grandmother use some of this speak. She worked in the fields right beside these women when she was younger. Yes, even after slavery was a thing of the past they still had to make a living and worked the fields. You have done such a beautiful job with this and your growing talent astounds me to no ends. Great Job on this.

I hope you are proud of this piece, the character was instantly likeable and you brought the whole piece alive with a simple narrative, not too overburdened with images and metaphor. I can't really add to the above, and I could go on all day but I won't. I have no critique for this - you did a fantastic job, bravo. :)

^there's a problem I've always had with this line, if it ain't about color, than why was black used in the description?

Just to clarify....It is not about the fact of choosing a "black" man but about having the freedom to do so. In that time that would not have been an option because of his color!

I absolutely love what you did here Deana, I am glad I submitted the challenge, you did a great job.

Oh, this feeble mind does wander
To those years so long ago
Master wrapped us in his chains
Hearts were singin sad and low

Supposin you aint happy
No fancy vacations and all
I hear ya sayin "times are hard"
Rememberin the sweat
On the backs of my people
along with the stripes!

^ I thought these along with the beginning stanza was a good smack at us nowadays. We find so much to complain about and so many of us don't bother looking back at what was overcome to allow us the life we live today.

Say your havin trouble
makin ends meet
Remember once,
pretendin I wern't hungry
So my little Sophie could eat
without feelin bad
weren't enough to go round.

^A great remembrance of sacrificing for children and doing what you had to do to make sure they didn't go without, even if you had to.

A beautiful write Deana.

Bravo. This is one of the best writes I have seen in a long time and we should all take heed at the words you have written. Well done.