It actually did make a lot of sense.
i think it would be better if it was correctly written. At first when i saw it, i was going to zap it, and move on. But i don't know, i started reading it, and kept on. Then i checked your other poems, and they aren't written this way. Was it on purpose?

i liked it.. harsh, simple words. But the emotion was there.

This made alot of sense good write

This was acutally one of my favorite.
the way it all happened so fast
is whats made it so real<3
good job<333

It does make sense . :]
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