"My love so long ago,
Had nothing left to show.
Froze, inside of my core,
Trying to find my hearts door."
>>first stanza is very good, but it would be better if in the third line you leave out "of" it's kind of redundant and just makes grammar bad. also apostrophe is missing on the last line "heart's".

"It was lost in loneliness,
And I was starting to miss.
The comfort of someone near,
Not my reflections tear."
>>this stanza it's a bit hard to read. punctuation has a lot to do with it. What do you mean by "it" in the first line? be specific. this is so the reader won't be confused on what are you talking about because you are starting with a new stanza it is good to state your idea again and keep the reader entertained. also instead of a comma you should a period should be there. on the second line again it is an unfinished thought. what where you missing? so this can be fixed by taking away the period and not putting a punctuation. this is a continued thought. the last line it doesn't really make sense. maybe you can reword it to "Not my tear's reflection."

after those first stanzas i see that you are trying to rhyme a lot. this kind of makes the whole poem lose its whole whammy. rhyming sometimes is a good thing but you can also make the poem feel out of place by trying to find words that rhyme and sometimes those words don't make sense together. so no rhyming more words that make sense. also look for words that need apostrophes. other than that i think your poem was great. it wasn't a love poem like the ones that i always read. all the same. unique and original. keep writing!

Ada

Not bad it has some good imagery and such. My only criticism is that some of the rhmyes seem too forced. i give i a 4/5 tho. keep it up.

I liked it, i liked the intensity, and how much emotion there is. Its clear youve poured your heart into it. But like the above comments, i found that the rhyme scheme was a little too forced. But i really liked it apart from that. Nice work.

This poem is a LOT better than the last one I read of yours. I havnt read any of your other poems (maybe I should) so maybe the last poem was just a one time flaw, but this one is great. "hearts" in the first line should be "heart's" but besides that its great. The only potential for improvment would be a LITTLE more imagery. Some of the sentences have only 1-2 adjective or passionate words. pump them up and well... its already awesome.

I don't have a whole lot to say, seeing as a majority of the people whom have commented has mentioned a majority of the stuff I was going to mention. So, I noticed you use capitalization in the begining of ever line. It isn't needed, you only need to capitalize if you are starting a sentence or you are emphasising a word.

Overall I really liked the poem, keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

It's a tad too confusing for me
I loved the Idea as well as the length, but your wording was slightly confusing. That for me through the whole thing off and I couldn't concentrate on the message. Other than that, it was a great poem.

~thank you for the poem