Comments : Addition

  • 15 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    You are my Addition
    ^
    I can relate to this line and it is a good way to start, on familiar ground.

    you are my drug
    ^
    You kind of said this in the first line, still it is nice to shout a message. It gives it a stronger emotional feel. :D

    everytime when I am with you I get high
    ^
    You are speaking of a high chemistry relationship; similar to the 'high' off a drug.

    you make me feel like I am on cloud nine
    ^
    I can see the imagery here, almost like experiencing an out of body sensation.

    they say that I should not be addicted to you
    ^
    Here is a nagative part; other influences attempting to save you from yourself.

    but once I start I can't stop
    ^
    Nice reference to the addiction! :D

    I love that you are my personal drug
    ^
    Again, reiterating the line above; shouting the message. :D

    I love how you make me feel loved cared for and like I am the only thing in your life
    ^
    A tribute that almost sings out a celebration.

    I love you and I miss you
    ^
    A simple, bold statement.

    I wait to feel the high but in good time you will be all mine
    ^
    This ends by leaving an eliment of doubt in the readers mind. It makes them wonder if this love is permanent. Maybe another poem to explain the reasons for the doubt?

    Well done for writing these words.

    Michael

  • 15 years ago

    by neo

    One time just one time ever which was forever ago I felt like this. Word for word. Now I alone in my mind