Comments : I'm Useless Without You

  • 15 years ago

    by Bare My Paradox

    My hands are tools for unwrapping
    Your secret fears
    And taking them apart

    It's a beauty. The poem, wonderfully depicts the strength and power of the love you both share! I love it. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Kaila

    I'm confused. The first two stanzas don't hold the same theme as the others unless I'm missing it? They carry almost the same line but I don't see it in the beginning which kind of threw me for a second. I liked this poem. But nothing was enticing about it. Here are some suggestions:

    try to use same syllabol count: it will make your flow more together and attract the reader

    Try synonyms: they work to spice up vocabulary

    Keep writing
    4/5