Lovely write, short and to the point. I liked your choice of wording and the overall flow was good.

I must say, although greatly worded, I do have a few minor details to mention:

I would have liked to see more puncuation overall. Puncuation is very important in poetry it shows the reader when to pause or stop as well as adding to the overall flow.

I also noticed you use capitalization in the begining of ever line. It isn't needed, you only need to capitalize if you are starting a sentence or you are emphasising a word.

Other than that it was well written, keep it up.

Peace, Joe