I LOVE the ending! It is so beautiful! And makes you think!

God, you are amazing.

<by night, even the sky's eyes give an loving glance.>

^^ Should the "an" be "a"?

:)

100% 5/5 :)

Bri~

Joe
You did a wonderful job on this. Beautiful just Beautiful. *sigh
Take Care
Cindy

*whistles* i love it. on its own it stands as a great poem. its hard to tell its even a translation. thank you for doing the translation it shed much light on the other poem 5/5

I agree with Joshua, thank you for the wonderful translation, I can barely tell that it is translated because the wording was beautiful!!

Obviously, as it is a translation, the flow is a bit off in places but it gives it a bit of character compared to a every-line-must-have-the-same-syllable-count piece.

This is great Joe, 5/5

Keep writing,
Emily :)