Remembering You

by Inside the Liar   May 4, 2009


Hair spun with onyx and
Pulled back in a band, wearing
Blue cut-up jeans
And black tank that's slithering from your shoulder
With dozens of beaded accessories
Clutching your neck and arms. -
This I how I choose to remember you.

How you used to laugh
To the point of tears
At the stupidest joke in the world
Hours after it escaped from my tongue.
And then get pissed off
When everyone made fun of you for it.
This is how I choose to remember you.

Your 'oh, I can do that later,' attitude
And the way you could make the most disgusting
Combination of food in the world sound appetizing.
Your guitar slung easily across your back
Drumsticks firmly in hand -
Always ready to perform a song.
This is how I choose to remember you.

Hollering for someone to help you set up your amp
Before the lights dimmed out and the crowd came in.
The way you went right up to the microphone
And put the swarm under your spell almost effortlessly.
Introducing your newest song
You always ended by saying you'd never leave the stage without finishing.
This is how I choose to remember you.

Now I stand over the black pit of the dug grave
So many thoughts swirling through my head
And I feel like I can't breathe.
I feel like you cheated, somehow.
You were pale and lifeless in the hospital
And you held my hand as your drew your last breath.
I can't let that be how I remember you.

And like a whirlwind your memory rushes by
Carried on the autumn leaves that rush past my face.
You lied to your crowd that last night.
You said you wouldn't leave the stage in the middle
Of a song. And life is the longest song you had to write.
And you left; faded away to nothing.
Is that how I should remember you?

Copyright 2009 S. Sieglaff

I don't think this one is perfect. It's far from finished, and it isn't what I wanted it to be. But I'll post it and see what you all think.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Gizmo

    I loved this poem its very powerful with the repetition at the end of every stanza helps to reinforce what you are trying to get at and this reinforcing hel;ps to sadden it even further.

    you kept it real the whole way through, you said how you would remember them, its down to earth and you didn't build them up to be something in which they never where.

    the image of no leaving the stage is something which is powerful. the image of life being like a stage is one which has alwyas been there, and incorportaing that into your poem is something which was brilliant.

    your ending is very strong also.You lied to your crowd that last night.
    You said you wouldn't leave the stage in the middle
    Of a song. And life is the longest song you had to write.
    And you left; faded away to nothing.
    Is that how I should remember you?
    - diff my favorite bit and i'll probally remember it for a very long time.

    nomination.

  • 15 years ago

    by Tammi

    I love it so full of pain and love and I feel your emontions flowing very well done 5/5

    Tammi,

  • 15 years ago

    by Krista

    Wow Skye. There isn't enough good things that I can say about this. It was an outstanding poem, and it's definatley got my nomination and a place on my favorites list. It's very moving and sad. I liked how you listed all the good things you want to remember about this person, and how you described them. It was a very sad poem. I was just about to cry. No flaws with it; I think it's perfect how it is. Just beautiful.

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