Empty

Excellent poem...
very nice use of words..
great piece..

Still it kills,
Within every vain.
It aches without remorse,
Burns with pain.

*I like how you started this. The use of loose syntax is intresting. It adds to the emotions.*

The demon rushes through my blood
Holding on tight.

The angels wings have been taken,
Doomed on flying to the light.

*Did you mean to put a space in between those two stanzas, if you did tha's clever. I felt like you were pausing. Like it*

With no intentions on giving up,
Smiles with hate and glee.
So hard to get away,
You have taken it all!
What more do you want from me?

*I really like this poem. I would go back and make the last stanza have fou lines lik the first. I love the emotions and imagery. Very nice work. Nik*

I love your poem it has this weird thing to me that i understand i'm in love with your poems hun...