Comments : Beginnings

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    "Time goes by.
    Moments pass on.
    The storm will eventually subside on this rainy town"

    Yes it seems the storms always do

    "One of these days, we'll walk out of these doors
    and somewhere find windows.
    A place where no walls are built and no chains
    to hold us down."

    And before the sky there are no fences facing
    Even though that has been pointed out by the masters it never hurts to reword a profound problem that we all have faced

    "Beginnings aren't always easy.
    But somehow they're refreshing.
    A brand new page in our diary.
    A fresh pen from the package.
    It's time to write down a new story.
    And fix the ending."

    The first step to solving any problem is the accepting there is a problem. You have what it takes to be a poet

    Another five

  • 15 years ago

    by Jad

    This was a good poem. The idea was creative and good but it seemed the flow was somewhat off again. The emotion in the poem was good though. Good job.