by Jad May 7, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
I try not to care |
Your poem was expressive and full of life's frustration and by the words one of life's b--l breakers(unrequited love). You certainly got your message over to me as in my lifetime I too have been there on a few occasions and felt sympathy for you, All the ingredients for a great poem. You must read it and edit it the mistakes I came across seem obvious so see if you can correct them if you do need help let me know. Ray S 4/5 |