Very unique, interesting, confusing poem. reason why i say it is confusing is because you need punctuations to help the reader distinguish a new thought from an old one. the poem is very painful, and insightful in your thoughts and feelings. i can tell it is a sincere poem because of your diction. i think with a few tweaks this poem can be one of the top ones.

also the first stanza needs to be reworded. try reading it aloud and see where you need a period. you can tell this by the pauses you make when you read.

i like the way you play with words. it's risky but it works with this piece. overall i give you 4/5

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Once again you score.

Wow... this was amazing. The diction and imagery you used are so good. I love the style and the title is perfect. Keep it up, I love your stuff. Shanik

This was different but I really like it,
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Did you see the pain across my lips with mercy of death
Can you heal me again with that unbearable touch?