How tempting it would be to lose yourself within dreamland forever MaryAnne..

This poem has a different built up then your other poems and it was a delight to read!

As I set foot on this newly discovered land,
A man suddenly approaches me, a rose at hand.
His alluring smile vanishes all insecurity within,
Here is where I can be myself, no strings attached

^^

I want such a man as well, lol!

Lovely words about a situation many people would like to drift off in..especially the female readers:)

In my opinion i think the flow was a little off.
but other than that i think you did an excellent job with this poem, you write very well.

(p.s i'm sorry if my comments are unsatisfactory i'm not good at picking apart peoples work let alone my own.)
well done
5/5.

This poem was good but it wasn't intresting to me. You followed all of the good writing techniques but I was never captivated. 4/5