Comments : Mind, Body and Soul

  • 15 years ago

    by Obscura

    This is a great poem its deep and meaningful i liked it alot there is a good stucture to it nad it was a overall brilliant poem

    well done

  • 15 years ago

    by Saul

    Great great great job!! I love this! It captures all of the emotion all of the different type of sensation in a way that solidifies how we feel for someone - mind, body and soul!! Very impressive!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Hallo A Lilium

    This poem is different. And I like that. It holds
    no exact rhythm. The flow is nicely enhanced though. You continued to allow the same phrases to be used over again in each stanza. That was intriguing. This was very deep on a level I cannot seem to express. You illustrated a picture with words. Your body is the temple. Is this poem about God? Or a man? I can't seem to make up my mind on which. Although it would seem more conclusive to say it is about God. Because everything fits his description.

    "Body:
    A temple fused with taste
    A sanctuary filled with softness
    A palace for pleasure
    A confinement of crazed intentions
    A place I keep him."

    - You keep him within all your key parts. Besides your heart. I noticed that as well. It's
    very beautiful. This piece is alluring. Hypnotic qualities. Absolutely breathtaking. The difference makes it all the better.

    Bravo!
    *applauds*
    5/5

    -Lilium