I think you may have hit the s instead of a c as you have a lot of some instead of come if you will pardon the pun. I think perhaps in this poem you may have rushed it,you really need to edit it again Michael as its flow is off. It stutters if you get my jist. I will come back in a couple of days and read it again then give it a score. RaY S

Another hit :)

Mike, this was a splended write full of emotion. I loved the form you chose to do as well as the flow and choice of wording. Overall a well thought out write. Keep up the great work.

Peace, Joe

I like the style of your writing in this poem. Not only it's fluent but also goes well with the theme. Very enjoyable!

A great poem. Your words had me captivated from beginning to end, and your repetition of the two lines:

"Is a dream a lie if it doesn't come true?"
&
"In the slumbering seasons of Deja Vu"

^These repeated lines were powerful and the technique skillfully used. Bravo.