by Esther May 14, 2009
category :
Life, society /
other
Am I dead? |
by Lady Nik
I really liked this. But one thing that bothered me was the third stanza. The way you have it worded makes the poem look less appealing to the eye. I would shorten the sentences so they don't look so long. But other then this I got a creepy feeling from this. Great work hun. Nik |
by NiQk
Ehh... I dont quite understand. I am very sorry my comments arent always... Praise. I disd like it, It's just confusing. I know you asked for 1 for 1 and thats what i was planning but now I'm definately reading more. there's something about your poetry that i love! Expect more comments |
by Good Enough
Wow. this poem is.. ok it has alot of emotion in it and i can feel it. its like you want to die but why? u should live! |