by Kaila May 15, 2009
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
When i fought with my mom |
I liked the concept of this piece, though the ending bit was sad, but I think you could do a lot more and make it into a more elaborate and detailed piece. Go into more detail about him standing by your side, and soothing your worries, and then how he left and took all of that joy with him. I just felt this poem was a bit too short and concise. |
by Gness
This is so sad its hard to let go of things your used to and care about. Well done though. |