Bad Moon Rising

by Melpomene   May 17, 2009


I once twirled the moon
in the palm of my hand,
transfixed was I
by the spirit in your eyes.

Antique was his heart.

You feared eternity
more than existence alone,
never did I emphasize
until you handed me
your immortality.

..Like kryptonite it drained me.

He vanished only;
to dance with gravity
I was pensive
while he was released.
Stellar became afflictive,
darkness was my home.

May I show you something?

Let me exhibit moonlight,
yes, across the floor.
Let me allow you to see
where we sat...
-On the eve of confession-

and yet I was hung,
from the edge of the moon,
Not understanding my death
as I was cursed with eternity.

"Immortality only exists,
in the heart of the beholder.
And in my absence you managed,
only to lose your heart"

I was vulnerable.

We were two
but were we ever as one?

I once saw a bad moon rising,
though it was beautiful after all.

Forever we dance. We are eternity.

For a Club Challange. Note: Wasn't sure what section to post this poem in, although it is a love I believe it fits well into the dark section also.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Timothy r

    Hi Mel, it has been awhile, but man, this poem is absolutely fantastic, the opening phrase was right on the mark, I wish I could use metaphors as effortlessly as you have here, look forward to reading more to catch up, Timothy r

  • 15 years ago

    by Sourav

    Amazing write. Your use of metaphors are so strong and... Way you've projected the whole thing... whole imagination and the passion behind it... just so gripping!
    Loved your poem!

  • 15 years ago

    by Nee

    So I believe the lover died too..if I get this right.
    I love this, you always tend to leave me breathless before your writings.

    "Let me exhibit moonlight,
    yes, across the floor.
    Let me allow you to see
    where we sat...
    -On the eve of confession-

    and yet I was hung,
    from the edge of the moon,
    Not understanding my death
    as I was cursed with eternity."
    ^Very dark lines you penned here, amazingly expressed yet so full of sadness and gloom.

    "only to loose your heart""
    ^Did you mean lose? I'm not sure loose fits here..

    Very good write hun :) and you did such an awesome work with the challenge.
    Way to go~

  • 15 years ago

    by debbylyn

    I always love the use of the moon in metaphors and love poems...this one is very unique and gives one pause to reflect and think a bit...nicely written ...

  • 15 years ago

    by Lu

    I once twirled the moon
    in the palm of my hand,
    transfixed was I
    by the spirit in your eyes.
    ^^^
    Mel I love this opening. The imagery of "I once twirled the moon, in the palm of my hand" was amazing !!!!

    and yet I was hung,
    from the edge of the moon,
    Not understanding my death
    as I was cursed with eternity.
    ^^^
    This in my 2nd favorite part. "Hung from the edge of the moon" <---- such uniqueness. I love it !!!!

    You did wonderfully on this challenge and penned a mind-blowing piece.

    Loved it Mel !!!!

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