I am amazed at this. Your writing has progressed and completely transformed itself since I started reading your work a long time ago. It's just beautiful the way you write now, not that it wasn't before, but this is so graceful. So full of a massive range of words and always a deep meaning.
You never disappoint me, hun. Just wonderful.

5/5

Tammie xo

I absolutely love your word choice in this piece and it was one of my picks for the challenge. Great use of metaphors and imagery.

I once twirled the moon
in the palm of my hand,
transfixed was I
by the spirit in your eyes.
^^^
Mel I love this opening. The imagery of "I once twirled the moon, in the palm of my hand" was amazing !!!!

and yet I was hung,
from the edge of the moon,
Not understanding my death
as I was cursed with eternity.
^^^
This in my 2nd favorite part. "Hung from the edge of the moon" <---- such uniqueness. I love it !!!!

You did wonderfully on this challenge and penned a mind-blowing piece.

Loved it Mel !!!!

I always love the use of the moon in metaphors and love poems...this one is very unique and gives one pause to reflect and think a bit...nicely written ...

So I believe the lover died too..if I get this right.
I love this, you always tend to leave me breathless before your writings.

"Let me exhibit moonlight,
yes, across the floor.
Let me allow you to see
where we sat...
-On the eve of confession-

and yet I was hung,
from the edge of the moon,
Not understanding my death
as I was cursed with eternity."
^Very dark lines you penned here, amazingly expressed yet so full of sadness and gloom.

"only to loose your heart""
^Did you mean lose? I'm not sure loose fits here..

Very good write hun :) and you did such an awesome work with the challenge.
Way to go~

Amazing write. Your use of metaphors are so strong and... Way you've projected the whole thing... whole imagination and the passion behind it... just so gripping!
Loved your poem!

Hi Mel, it has been awhile, but man, this poem is absolutely fantastic, the opening phrase was right on the mark, I wish I could use metaphors as effortlessly as you have here, look forward to reading more to catch up, Timothy r