Think this poem was a bit overburdened with emotion to be able to pull any from the reader.

'The night you left me I was in sorrow for eternity.'

Doesn't make clear sense to me since the past 'I was' then 'eternity' which is a never ending span of time. Perhaps you meant to say 'for what felt like eternity'. Or 'I am in sorrow for eternity' although the latter doesn't make any sense either.

'I wanted to be with you 'till the end of time,'

This makes more sense but it doesn't rescue it from the pitfall of cliche.

'regardless of what it took - I loved you.
Forever; Always 'till eternity.'

Still can't my head around the 'eternity' you're talking about here. It's not realistic, and it's too farfetched.

'I would reach to the moonlit stars'

I would reach 'for' the moonlit stars makes more sense here, though the moon doesnt light the stars, the stars are suns and the moon is a small planet reflecting light, so again, this is an unclear image.

'Darling, I love you. Oh how I'd do anything
everything just to be with you. '

You wrote 'I loved you' before, now it's 'I love you'. You also might benefit from punctuation to seperate anything and everything.

'I want to walk your steps
and reach those whom you reached.
I want to impact society
as you've impacted it.
I want to be your lover
forever and ever. '

Great except the last two lines. Expand on how this person has impacted society?

'Oh how I'd walk to the skies above
just to see you one more time,
just to be with you.
You're my heart,
my soul, my everything.
I love you, oh how I do. '

This declaration of love becomes pitiful and droning after a while =/, the expressions are unfortunately lost here. 'You're my heart' was a strange phrase.

'I've cried a thousand tears of joy
and a million tears of sorrow
whilst pondering...
what might have been
if just-
if just you stayed here,
here on earth with me.'

This didn't have the effect you wanted it to either; 'stayed here, on earth with me' sounds like something from E.T. and the contrast of joy and sorrow has been done countless times.

Unfortunately Joe, this doesn't hold the strength you needed it to. It comes across as a poetic rant of lost love which is written on blogs all the time. You can do so much better than this; I know you appreciate honesty and if I came across too harsh, I apologise but I've seen you write better than this.

"The night you left me, I felt as if
I was in sorrow for an eternity.
I wanted to be with you 'till the end of time,
regardless of what it took - I loved you.
Forever; Always."
`Joe, this feeling is felt by so many of us when someone leaves. We feel as though we'll always be sad, and we would do anything in the entire world just to have them back in our lives. Perfectly written, so simply said but sooo many of us can relate to this.

"I would reach to the vivid stars
and grab a hold of them for you, if I could.
Darling, I loved you. Oh, how I'd do anything,
everything just to be with you."
`Awh how sweet is this.. your emotion really comes out in your words, your love seems so deep for this person.

"I want to walk your steps
and reach those whom you reached.
I want to impact society
as you've impacted it.
I want to be your lover
forever and ever."
`Maybe say "I would trace your steps", I didnt really like "walk your steps" - I like your repetition with 'forever and ever' you definatly try to emphasize this, as your main point.. what you want the reader to remember. You wanted to love them forever.

"Oh how I'd walk to the skies above
just to see you one more time,
just to be with you.
You're my heart,
my soul, my everything.
I loved you, and always will."
`To be honest this is cliche, but it doesnt matter because its coming from deep within the heart and speaks of truth and pure feelings and love, as well as emotion.

"I've cried a thousand tears of joy
and a million tears of sorrow
whilst pondering...
what might have been
if just-
if just you stayed here,
here with me."
`This is sooo heart-breaking! Of course we always wonder what things could have been like if we still had that person.. if they stayed. :/

"God reached down from heaven,
grabbed hold of you and took you,
took you from my loving sight.
Darling, oh I'd reach for you,
reach to the end of the world,
hold you tight, and make love to you,
not letting go 'till you told me to.
Sweetheart, I'll love you,
Always; Forever."
`This is sooo sweet and yet so sad... probably one of my favorite stanzas of the piece, a powerful ending, again - repeating and emphasizing your points youve made in the previous stanzas.

Good job Joe!

Temps

Joe
I can relate to this poem.....When you lose the love of your life it is the worst pain you will ever endure. There are times when you don't think you can go on......the grieving and mourning seem to go on forever. Good job.
Take Care
Cindy