Love's Confetti.

Nice work. Love's Confetti, what a good idea. Beautiful words to say to someone you love. Well done.

A good write from you though I can't say it's something I'd come back to and read again to get something else out of because it's quite deliberate in conveying your feelings and thoughts, I actually think you need to step outside your comfort zone and write as a narrator that isn't you? You've done it before but a lot of your poems is you communicating your feelings which is good but at the same time, how is a reader who doesn't know you mean to get anything from them? It's a personal poem and whilst it's sweet and flows nicely there's not much in the language except colour and adjevtives, and the metaphor of confetti you didn't expand on enough considering it's the title.

Problem I had with this that it was too needy. Like 'do this' was a sentence structure you used too much. I loved the third stanza for example. The fourth was a hefty ending - the last two lines being the weakest in the poem due to the trite simile of a feather in the wind (which I've used before) but I tried to use it to suggest I was lost. 'Light as a feather' could be anything. You could be as light as an ant and it still wouldnt be any more or less poetic.

Wasn't a bad write Temps, but I'd just like to see you narrating from a different perspective. Write as someone who isn't you, or like you, step out of the sad/nature/love poems and come out and try writing as a different character. It's fun, and you'll enjoy it!

Temps:)

A very passionate plea this is. I love the gentle tone and the words you used..

Enchant me with permanent memories,
light as a feather, i'll drift gracefully,
along the skyline with a smiling heart

^^
Indeed love is supposed to make us feel like that: light as a feather and with a smiling heart..smiling heart is a really beautiful way to describe how it feels:)

They say that when you stop looking for love, you will find it..out of the blue it conquers you..I wish for you to find that special someone who will love only you and treat you like a princess always Temps, for you deserve it 100%:)

Excellent work:)

*hugs*

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