Remember?

Very nice written. You use alot of daily words but you make them sound so good together! I really loved this poem, you're very talented. But personally, I would change this part:
"Your smile was magic
Your eyes a deep blue
I took it for granted
Can't help but miss you"
in
"Your smile was like magic
Your eyes a deep blue
I took it for granted
I can't help but missing you"

But that's my opinion of course.
But I really thought u did a great job.

Keep writing poems!

Donjeta

This is my favorite part. "Memories are fading
But my love is still strong
I crave for your touch
It's just been so long

I can still hear your voice
And the words that you said
I remember your giggle
How your cheeks got so red"
and i loved the part about taking it all for granted. that happens to easily. we have something or someone, and we never truly appreciate what they did for us, or even to us, and then they're gone. it's a real life lesson. great job getting the point across :)

I loved this piece, it speaks of true revelations and pure yearnings that any memory of your lover jsut sparks incessant pains and aches from the deep burrows of the heart. I'm sure most could relate, but what I liked most is the way you wrote it.

When you said we were over
I wished for a lie
^ ^ ^
This is my favourite line. I've been through that too and like the way you put it in simple yet meaningful words.

I don't know howw to describe how fantastic that was. You're an amazing writer. 5/5

I love your poetry and your choice of words. 5/5, Em