Wow interesting write.. I really enjoyed this, I thought it was really original. I loved how you inserted the definition of strength in a way that it didnt hurt the poem.. Interesting thoughts that you have let us read here. I think you could continue with it, I got done reading and I just felt like there was more to read and there wasnt. I'm not sure if I really have any good suggestions as to what direction to take this however, I suppose just expanding on this would be the best route.

Good job!

5/5.

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