I really like this type of talking poetry and you certainly have managed to get your message across in this poem I hope it was taken in by the oerson it was obviously aimed at.
Not eady to structure a poem so do as you are doing go with the flow as the saying goes 5/5 Ray S

A brilliant write.. full of truth, LOL. I always enjoy your poems... as they are full of meaning, and leave the reading thinking!

P.S. This is my favourite verse...
"The pain that you feel can be countered..."
And your youth's a crutch you can't see
You don't need prescriptions, you want them,
They're your piteous sanctuary."

Well written AND expressed!