'But I hardly believe anything these days

But these memories are what hold me'

Those are your two strongest lines in the piece, so keep coming back to those. So far you have an amazing song.

What I can only say is to use a wonder range of words. You so far have good repetition and rhyming in the first verse, but make sure you keep it uniform.

Other then that, it is beautifully written!

~Ally

I can't seem to get the rhythm though I am certain it is in your head

I liked these lyrics a lot however I feel you need to work on your flow to allow your lyrics to seem more catchy

Still good write

5/5